I've left the other vesion of this I was working on somewhere. I have to go find it. But see, what I was doing here was changing the line breaks to emphasize certain words to make me not have to say to the reader, look, this is what is happening here. I hope they understand. Maybe they did already. I need to know when to trust that I've said enough, trust the reader, and when to say more--unpack those images.
A Sudden Change of Seasons
We started on a family trip to the city, but
in stacks at a crowded bookstore,
searching for books in ancient
Greek and Latin, my father
disappears. The aisles are now oddly empty.
Only my mother and me, bumping
into each other in our frantic search.
It is later
than we thought. We’ve missed
the downtown bus. Eat lunch instead
in Liverpool, at a outdoor café. In the sun.
Between planters of petunias and golden
honey locusts, we watch for my father.
I think I see him,
an anonymous man
in a brown felt hat and flapping trench coat
headed our way with a package of books
tied in brown twine. The city bus
blocks him from sight, won’t stop
when I try to flag it down. When it is gone
without us, my father is gone
again, too. I think he’s vanished
into the city until I spot him
sledding
with a group of children,
running
up the snowy hill with an air mattress.
Face full of fun and light,
he turns, waves once,
and continues on
without us.
Mary Stebbins
For Pa
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I don't like orphan lines, so for that reason alone, this isn't done yet. Comments? (jo(e)--don't be worried if you suggested something I didn't add it yet, I don't have the copies up here right now!)
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